Custom Story: DraKerZz's House [FULL]

[Obliviator27]

New custom story released, means new review from me. Huzzah. As usual, I intend to document my progress as I go along, and what I think as I play.
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Spoiler below!

- No map_caches. Good start.
- Grammar nazi brain exploding.
- Story premise is fairly basic.
- Common error, you just use the lamp entities to generate light.
- Welders between cellarbase. <3
- Your key was a pain to find, but it was found.
- Having the Brute show up just then was kind of cheap, as that's the only way forward.
- Your cellarbase in the area after the Brute doesn't have welders.
- If english is your first language, shame on you.
- Did you really just.....*sigh* Throwing corpses isn't scary, nor is it original.
- ...What? Nice ass?
- Oh. Armor. Hi.
- Who in the world is Mola?
- Missing welders.....gahh.
- Opening the trapdoor reveals....floor?
- Ooookay. Pulling all of the levers does the iron maiden sound. Why?
- Put the gear in place. Another corpse? Really?
- Yeah....not going to search all of these, especially since there's no boxlight, and I have no oil. Just going to open it in the level editor.
- Yet another corpse.
- To the next map.
- Key-door puzzles work...but try to avoid using them all the time.
- Wait...I came from upstairs....went downstairs....and ended up back upstairs?
- Another corpse.
- Time to go down the hatch. Surprising that the key wasn't there before, nor did this hatch lead anywhere.
- Evidently upsized Iron Maiden. Something's coming from that.
- Whoop, Suitor behind me. Didn't expect that.
- Ran down the hallway, and slaughtered by a Brute. Drat.
- Key to freedom. Excellent.
- I....what.

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Don't mean to bash this one too hard...but it's not very good. Though I didn't find any clipping, the mapping wasn't superb, lighting wasn't great at all. All of the "scares" involved monsters, armor, or teleporting naked guys. There was very little story, and the grammar issues was incredibly anti-immersive. Your ending was...well, to be honest, kind of lame. I don't mean to discourage you from continuing creating custom stories, but as long as you improve, we'll be fine.