(04-28-2012 07:31 AM)andyrockin123 Wrote: Pretty decent custom story. I admire the time and dedication you put into it! Mapping was good, but I wouldn't say "extremely detailed". Story was...well...*ahem* ...the scripting was by no means professional. It pained me to see you put "u" in the story multiple times. I understand English is not your primary language, but you shouldn't have put that in the description unless you had someone revise your work, perhaps one of the grammar/bug testers available on the forum? Lastly, I don't think I saw a single box light in that entire CS, you should try looking at levels in the actual Amnesia game for reference. Overall, 6/10. I'm just glad its not another jump scare/pewdiepie map.
I spent a WHOLE lot of time correcting the grammar for this; believe me, that "u" would not be your worst concern. Corrected over 200 mistakes, but missed one or two cause they were added near the end and such. And yes, lange is very dedicated ;D I'd say he put in about 97.5% of the work, and me 2.5% :3 Something like that.
I think for his first map it's quite good, and he learned a lot about scripting and mapping in general. I think we are considering some kind of sequel (with me helping a bit more in writing the story maybe), but it's not for sure.
Anyways, I think dnalange is a CS author to keep you eye on