Need opinion

[Homicide13]

Go with your instincts. It honestly doesn't matter if people like it or not, if you create something original than there is no reason for it not to exist. There are plenty of ways something like what you described can be easily integrated into a story and still be effective, but someone who does not know the entire story and the premise of your idea or how it is being presented can not really give you a good answer to the question you present. Ultimately, you are the only one qualified enough to make a decision about what does or does not go into your custom story.