Is this a good idea for a custom story?

[Area 72]

So, I've been thinking of making a custom story that primarily is a very sad story, but still trying to be scary.

The premise of the story is basically you are a father of a 6-year-old child. Your wife died during childbirth, also leaving the newborn dead. Now, you're very protective of the only thing important to you--your daughter, Isabella. But when you are framed for a crime you didn't commit, you seek refuge at a castle (need a name for it) a few miles away from town, which says they can help you. When you think it can get any worse, the castle's owner has kidnapped your daughter, and as a father, you will do whatever it take to find Isabella. Whatever.. it takes..

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Yes, it lacked lots of details. I wanted to keep some of the more detailed stuff if I decided to make it (depending on what you guys think). I do have a twist that goes along with it, but you're gonna have to play in order to figure it out.

So what do you think, is it a good idea or not?

[LHudson]

Bit of advice, make sure you give the player a reason why we should rescue this girl other than "she's your daughter". And not a "I need her for a ritual" kind of thing, I mean present us with great character strengths. It'll benefit the custom story greatly

[Area 72]

Thanks for the advice. I do have a reason for them taking the daughter, but I would have to think more about why you should go and get her. And if all else fails, I think the twist will do the trick.

[Reminiscity]

(08-28-2013 04:53 AM)LHudson Wrote:  Bit of advice, make sure you give the player a reason why we should rescue this girl other than "she's your daughter". And not a "I need her for a ritual" kind of thing, I mean present us with great character strengths. It'll benefit the custom story greatly

Isn't the fact that she's your daughter a good enough reason to rescue her? xD I would say it is.

[Ghieri]

(09-05-2013 09:51 PM)Reminiscity Wrote:  

(08-28-2013 04:53 AM)LHudson Wrote:  Bit of advice, make sure you give the player a reason why we should rescue this girl other than "she's your daughter". And not a "I need her for a ritual" kind of thing, I mean present us with great character strengths. It'll benefit the custom story greatly

Isn't the fact that she's your daughter a good enough reason to rescue her? xD I would say it is.

He shouldn't use that as the only reason, it becomes another "rescue the princess" trope stereotype.

Quote: But when you are framed for a crime you didn't commit,

That's stunningly like heavy rain. Though I hope you're going to do something more sophisticated than just exhibition through notes.

[Kreekakon]

In my opinion, you CAN use "rescue your daughter" as the initial pushing force to send your player character off on their journey. However during the course of the game make sure to flesh out certain aspects to both make the story seem more interesting, and to make the player regard rescuing your daughter all the more a very necessary task.

[summit]

(09-06-2013 06:37 AM)Kreekakon Wrote:  In my opinion, you CAN use "rescue your daughter" as the initial pushing force to send your player character off on their journey. However during the course of the game make sure to flesh out certain aspects to both make the story seem more interesting, and to make the player regard rescuing your daughter all the more a very necessary task.

Isn't that used in AAMFP? I dunno.

Maybe you can make a custom story not scary, focused on the main story, emotional, pyschological horror.

[Onlinezigeuner]

Just go for it. Im glad for any good custom story.