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Alright, finally decided to do a thread for this!

Been working on this for a while pretty inactively, but currently a lot more active, since my school ended. All i can say that this won't be out in a while, since this is just in the beginning. I'm currently working on this alone.

I've been waiting and wishing to do an well made and unique custom story.

This post will be updated as it progresses more.

Any kind of criticism is welcome.

--------------Introduction to Plot----------------------
Your friend Jim and you are driving back from your hiking trip. Approximately at the half-way point of your journey, something flashes across the road to the other side of the forest. Next thing you know, you wake up on the ground next to your car that has crashed into a rock. Jim has vanished, along with all of your supplies. The only thing left is the flashlight in the car's side-pocket. There's a path near your car crash. You follow the path into the Forest, and start looking for Jim.
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Screenshots:
[Image: t7ej6e.jpg]

So...no info about the actual story?Just a pic?

But the pic looks good.

(06-09-2012, 06:44 PM)kartanonperuna Wrote: [ -> ]So...no info about the actual story?Just a pic?

But the pic looks good.

I'll add info, and improve this post later. Like i said, it's in the very begining, though i have the story figured out.

E: Introduction to Plot added.

Just by looking at the picture, it seems this custom story will be good.

(06-10-2012, 07:47 PM)Xvideogamer720X Wrote: [ -> ]Just by looking at the picture, it seems this custom story will be good.

Because pretty pictures are important!

I agree, pwetty picture Smile

Looking forward to it!

Looking good and storyline sounds interesting. GL with the project man Smile

looks nice Smile

(06-10-2012, 08:41 PM)Robosprog Wrote: [ -> ]Time to give my view on this.

For starters, that story reminds me of chupacabra for some reason.
Anyway, the story, from what you've said, seems very scrappy. No offense but you see something in car, car crashes, friend gone. Are you going to include evidence of a struggle, signs of him being unconscious? Because really, people don't just vanish.
People just vanishing cannot really be used this early into a story anyway, because it means people ask "why" and sometimes the writers haven't thought why. And then, all your supplies are missing, up until this point it seemed alright, nothing special or bad.
But, all your supplies are missing BUT your flashlight? Why would they leave this? How did they carry all your supplies? (We don't know how much was in the car.)
And, if it's a monster/slender man/chupacabra/paranormal activity thing, then why didn't they attack you when hiking? Why decide to attack someone in a car and then leave someone?
You haven't established this, and gave a very poor background to this. No offence, but from what we can see it looks really scrappy and made as an afterthought.

Again, this is just from what I can see and first impressions.

Maybe the people who had taken his friend had magical powers and paused time before the crash, levitated him out of the car and flew him to their castle and unfroze time

Looks good!
I will keep an eye on it Smile

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