02-15-2011, 04:51 PM
02-15-2011, 05:30 PM
Not so bad for a first story. 
You can fill it up with more stuff to make it more interesting; but as you said: it's work in progress.
Btw, I wouldn't have thought you were 13 until you mentioned it with caps lock on. Don't do that.
Also, as a tip for your story, you're making it very easy for the player. The stone is just outside of the door, the note says where exactly the key is.
Also, "i" is written with a capital letter "I". For your notes.. Just saying.
You can fill it up with more stuff to make it more interesting; but as you said: it's work in progress.
Btw, I wouldn't have thought you were 13 until you mentioned it with caps lock on. Don't do that.
Also, as a tip for your story, you're making it very easy for the player. The stone is just outside of the door, the note says where exactly the key is.
Also, "i" is written with a capital letter "I". For your notes.. Just saying.
02-15-2011, 07:08 PM
(02-15-2011, 05:30 PM)Tottel Wrote: [ -> ]Not so bad for a first story.
You can fill it up with more stuff to make it more interesting; but as you said: it's work in progress.
Btw, I wouldn't have thought you were 13 until you mentioned it with caps lock on. Don't do that.
Also, as a tip for your story, you're making it very easy for the player. The stone is just outside of the door, the note says where exactly the key is.
Also, "i" is written with a capital letter "I". For your notes.. Just saying.
Hi!
Thanks for the quick reply
I will fix my signature and use some of your tips :3
And its supposed to be easy in the beginning
02-15-2011, 08:21 PM
Really freaking nice! And you are only 13 years old!
Still, i agree with the Tottel with the note.
Anyway, really nice Looking forward to play it.
Still, i agree with the Tottel with the note.
Anyway, really nice
Looking forward to play it.