The Guest - Custom story

[Kman]

So I took the time to play this, was pretty good! Some advice though, first you need to add more color to your billboards and lights! From what I saw all of them were solid white, this can look good in certain scenarios but in general you want to mix it up. Try to color them to the time of day you're aiming for the map to be, it will give it a lot more atmosphere and such. Second, and this is probably my biggest complaint, no boxlights! this is a vital element to all custom stories, yet so many people skip them altogether. And while I'm on the topic of lights, you should have more pre-lit ones. I noticed almost all the light in each of the rooms was coming from windows, while this can look good you should always try to have a few lit up candles. Another rather big thing was there was no skybox, this is another vital element to custom story creation if you're gonna have any scenes where the player goes outside or even looks outside, as a black sky just looks bland and unrealistic. The puzzles were original, but very... unrealistic I'd have to say. I mean even if you are a wood cutter there is NO WAY anyone could construct an entire latter with just wood planks and a saw, especially in that amount of time. There also didn't seem to be much of a reason for why you were there or what the place you were at was, or in other words there wasn't much of a story to it. I was also able to see the closet scare coming from a mile away, but that's just because I've played enough custom stories to know what to expect when you see an oversized closet with all that said though, this was a very solid story! Not the best, but it was good. Understand that I'm only saying all this to help you, I'm not trying to just bash your story. But anyways, I hope you make more custom stories in the future (since you obviously have talent) and maybe take into account some of what I said