Escape From Mentalhospital

[Mine Turtle]

this is a very decent mod, although it was very brief.

the atmosphere of this mod gave me a Justine feel, along with a sense that my world (in-game) is in utter chaos and despair.

a few things that could be fixed though:

-this mod could be even better if continued, but the thing i would focus on is to have an actuall story here. (i realise that youre a mental person escaping from a hospital, but there needs to be more!)

-your spawning of the justine monster didnt really make much sense to me, maybe if you walked past a cell on the way down the stairs you could hear something lurking inside, but the door would then be locked, denying you access to witness what the room really holds. suspicion and explanation is key (although it isnt necessary, but it gives your mod some depth.). im not saying every monster needs a story, or explanation, far from it; amnesia didnt have much explanation once you were familiar of the threats it held, but before you knew, the story warned you of these lurking servants' presence in the castle, using sounds, story, description, subconcious warnings and sightings.

- i found it very difficult to exit the cell. maybe i didnt use my items correctly in the right places, but maybe you should give the player some mementos as ''hints'' to look back at if they're ever stuck. i personally love a challenge, instead of just being handed a key of salvation; so my solution to this problem i had was to be creative; to forklift the bed sideways, and then placing objects for me to further climb onto, over the ledge of the cell which contained me. this gave me a sort of awesome feeling once i was past the jail cell, but then it faded, seeing i knew i hadnt done it correctly. a good factor to this story would maybe be to give people the ability to think for themselves, though i would advise you to make sure they dont get stuck.

- the music in the office room was abnoxious, its the early 20th century, i doubt people would hear that kind of music; another thing i would add is to assign the music to be played from a sound entity placed on the gramophone (the audio device).

-some fluffing up on the mapping could be nice. some dirtpiles here and there (where they make sense), some rubble (where it makes sense), some scratches and stains of liquids (where they make sense) (im not saying the things youve put in the map already doesnt make sense, im just saying this as advice for future placements of content).

-the torture chambers didnt really make much sense to me; try replacing them with cellblocks, or even storage facilities. place these torture chambers (if theyre really necessary) in a lower part of the asylum; in the ''basement'', so to speak; away from the light of day, and from anyone being able to witness what horrors are being performed.


overall, i think this mod could become very good if worked upon. you have the atmosphere, and the tension. all you need now are:

- an actuall story (more indepth than the current)
- some mapping improvements
- some explanation of why you wake up where you are
- why you were put in the mindclinic
- what this man is actually doing to the inmates (if youre going with the ideas i have given you)
- and some extra creativity


hopefully you'll build on this mod, and if so, i will love to be able to play it again! ^^

Sorry,but i`m not gonna fix or continue this story anymore. I have so much work with another story wich i
started before this. I made this story a little for a test mechanics and stuff. This really wasn`t a "serious" one.
But the next one is gonna be more serious, and i have totally put time to
it.

whatever works man ^^, just take the advice i gave into concideration for a future story ^^