Can someone take a look?

[Damascus]

There are lots of problems I can point out.Never put one function inside another or you will get tons of errors. So, it should be organized like this:

void OnEnter()
{
stuff
}


void beginStory(string &in asTimer)
{
stuff
}

Like JMFStorm said, get rid of "void wakeup ()", it serves no purpose.
Make sure every function has its own open and close bracket.
Make sure every number with a decimal is followed by "f": e.g. "10.0f".