Creepypasta

**Zaffre** · 09-02-2012, 07:05 PM

(09-02-2012, 06:05 PM)failedALIAS Wrote:
(09-02-2012, 08:56 AM)Nemet Robert Wrote:
(09-02-2012, 12:02 AM)Zaffre Wrote:
(09-01-2012, 07:29 AM)Nemet Robert Wrote: This kind of thing gives me the shivers.

Well-written in my opinion.

And I think (at the end) I can foreshadow what may happen.
Yep. Maybe I shouldn't have gone with the whole "giant mouth with teeth" thing, but the Gray Rock Worm doesn't exactly have a face besides that.
"Hyper-realistic teeth". That part just killed the mood for me. I read a lot of creepypasta that used that kind of definition, and it really isn't good.
At least it wasn't "Hyper-Realistic Eyes".

I have to go take a shit. . .

in, HYPER-REALISM!

(09-02-2012, 08:56 AM)Nemet Robert Wrote:
(09-02-2012, 12:02 AM)Zaffre Wrote:
(09-01-2012, 07:29 AM)Nemet Robert Wrote: This kind of thing gives me the shivers.

Well-written in my opinion.

And I think (at the end) I can foreshadow what may happen.
Yep. Maybe I shouldn't have gone with the whole "giant mouth with teeth" thing, but the Gray Rock Worm doesn't exactly have a face besides that.
"Hyper-realistic teeth". That part just killed the mood for me. I read a lot of creepypasta that used that kind of definition, and it really isn't good.

I really couldn't think of anything else at the time, but I've revised it and hopefully made it better.