Cannibalism [RELEASED]

[Shev]

Well this story was alright, but there are a lot of problems. While it has more effort in it than other maps (which aren't really great either) I have my complaints.

Well lets begin

Spoiler below!

I saw a lot of lights sticking through walls, and this is kind of a basic problem that you could have avoided easily. I mean this kind of laziness pretty much nulls the rest of your hard work.

Jawless only shows up twice, and both times he's easy to avoid, like extremely easy. The first time in the cellar I just hid behind a box and waited him out he didn't even patrol past me, the second time as soon as I used that key I just ran downstairs while he bashed the door. This normally wouldn't be a problem, but he only shows up twice in the whole story.

The gameplay was kinda meh, just a "Go to dis room, find dis key, go to dis room use key, rinse repeat".

If the answers to where the keys where in the notes wasn't completely obvious, it was nearly impossible because nobody could tell that one key was in a fireplace because they couldn't understand it meant chimney. WHich isn't really your fault, but you should avoid these problems in the future.

The story was kind of meh, I mean its kind of creative, but it comes off to me as cliche. I mean the whole part of not knowing anything ties well with the rest of the story, and realizing it was you the whole time, but this is a bit too similar to amnesia's story with Danial and him forgetting. Plus those twists at the end where you're the bad guy have been becoming increasingly popular in mainstream media and pretty much everything. So you don't get any points for creativity really, but you don't really lose anything.

Theres a lot of room for improvement.

I'm not saying its bad, its certainly not the worst, but it could use some work.